I read your story all the way through without stopping to write down my comments as I read. This was unusual for me. I don’t like golf. Yet, like I said, I read it all the way through, so that’s good. I didn’t read your Introduction, just went straight into Pass 1. So I’m not sure if you said something there that would help me get the gist of what your story is about. “The Last Round” seems to indicate a death. The ending didn’t make any sense to me. Perhaps your point is buried in the story and needs to be brought out a little better. Perhaps rewrite the ending to do this. I did like the character development, that was very good. I cared about both characters in just the short space you wrote about them. I wish you the best! Angel Isaacs
I read your story all the way through without stopping to write down my comments as I read. This was unusual for me. I don’t like golf. Yet, like I said, I read it all the way through, so that’s good. I didn’t read your Introduction, just went straight into Pass 1. So I’m not sure if you said something there that would help me get the gist of what your story is about. “The Last Round” seems to indicate a death. The ending didn’t make any sense to me. Perhaps your point is buried in the story and needs to be brought out a little better. Perhaps rewrite the ending to do this. I did like the character development, that was very good. I cared about both characters in just the short space you wrote about them. I wish you the best! Angel Isaacs